I really lik ur poem!!

Nah its nice! i like this poem....flows nicely, and has a nice symmetric layout, with him at the beginning and u at the end, and both of u in the middle! i like the story told thru the rhyming verses x

Different aspect on love poems to me.

u make love sound so easy between u two and that great. i like how to first stanza rhymes and how to rhyming pattern changed in the second.

the words u used makes total sense and its not tht cliche. good job :)

Hm, I like this. Sweet and honest. In a way, it feels a little raw, but also nicely-honed with emotion. I like how you just wrote how you felt; a lot of us writers don't do that anymore, prefering memorizing the thesaurus and finding just that perfect word rather than just say it bluntly (not in a bad way) and being honest with ourselves.

Two things I'd suggest:

1. In the second stanza,
"And think that a relationship with you could begin."
I would just take out the [that] it doesn't serve much of a purpose; it feels like a filler word. Read it out loud without the word, and see how it feels to you.

2. "It was the comforting words coming from your sultry lips,"
I don't like the [sultry]. It's the wrong word to use here, where you're giving an image of confort and relief and just some peaceful love after a frustrating day. Sultry makes it sounds like you're writing erotica, or something of the sort.

Everything else is very nice. Also, I'd rework the end, make a line break in the before-last line. Other than that, nice work. I'm sure your boyfriend will love it.