Great poem, short but sweet. The story did not drag out, but most of the high points of the mood were captured.

At first I though it could use more detail, but I like that it was short but still powerful.

Good job.

Hey whoa hey!! lol..I loved this poem, short but sweet, and it said so much. I love how sensual it was, great write indeed. Timothy r

I like the title, the mood you have set and
above all the poem itself is very passionate
& sensual...good read!

Beautiful.Sexy but not trashy.

A very sexy most sensually written read indeed.

Dang Girl!!! You but a smile on my face ( :
Write On,
Bogie