Comments : Stray Heart

  • 14 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "Come with me, it will be okay
    I know your heart has gone astray."

    Excellent reassuring opening that is a great opening for the reader to read.

    "I will always hold you tight,
    in your darkness & your fright."

    "&" should be "and".

    "I want to know all about you,
    Remember - I have paid my dues.
    When the pain is too much & you just want to die,
    I understand why you do not cry."

    Again "&" should be "and". Good emotions expressed here.

    "When the pain & the hurt is too much to bear,
    I see your cuts - your soul laid bare.
    I know that your pain goes down to the bone,
    but remember - you are not on this journey alone. "

    This is so nice of you, you are there for that person and will guide them through life, be their friend through it all. Nicely said and well-penned.

    5/5 from me, take care and God Bless!

    ~MaryAnne

  • 14 years ago

    by He is the Reason

    That was a wonderfully written poem, the wording and emotions were deep and made the reader become immersed in the flow of the feelings. Short, good and well felt