Comments : Pathways of the Mind

  • 14 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "A mystic path winds through my mind
    Of misty gold, its trees sublime"

    A very entrancing opening, your wording lures me into this masterpiece. I love how you used "mystic" it sets the scene and is a unique word compared to all those other cliche words. Also, "Of misty gold" what beauty is portrayed in these three words, they just make your mind want to go to this path and see its surroundings.

    "Where heaven's winds caress the fields
    A Summer dreamscape so surreal"

    I find the word "caress" to be so descriptive and give off images, even though I have seen it everywhere, hear it fits right in. I can clearly picture this in my head, a image so breathtaking, I could stare at it for hours, nicely done my friend.

    "dreamscape" I've never heard that one before, its original, I like it!

    "And it spurs me to venture on
    To emerald depths of Avalon"

    Flawless rhyming and flow, I no longer feel like I am reading your poem but travelling in it, for it has come alive to me.

    "Where music dances on the breeze
    And magic swirls amidst the trees
    More blissful realms, I'll never find
    These dreamy pathways of the mind."

    I love how you mention music and magic, such entrancing subjects to focus on. Your ending leaves the reader wanting more and I like how you end it with the title.

    5/5 from me, you are such an amazing poet, good luck with all you do in life.....

    God Bless You and take care!

    ~MaryAnne

  • 14 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    What an excellent rhythm! 8 syllables per line....and a lovely flow, no forced rhyming. Good imagery. Very nice job!

  • 14 years ago

    by Christopher Wry

    Nice work good flow and image.

  • 14 years ago

    by NightFlyer

    Thank you all for your kind words, poets! And I am happy and grateful to recieve this Poems and Quotes award.