Fingers flowing gently across the keys
Whiles melodies capture your heart
And my song catches your sacred tears
I'll hold you close as your pain fills your soul
Let me play you another love song

*Lovely words my dear. I would change the fouth line to "I'll hold you close as the pain fills your soul" That way you don't have to use yours twice. I love the periodic syntax. The imagery is great as well*

As the piano sings to the heavens below
The angels will fly freely along the notes
Your body will be lifted as I hit the high notes
an when I play that single low key
You'll feel gods hands carry you

*I would change the second line to "along each notes" Not sure why but "each" sounds better to me.But this stanza is very soft spoken and so filled with love. I like it*

My heart is now the piano keys
and while God's in my heart
He will be playing my simple melodies
That will will rush out in beautiful streams
With dark reds and beautiful blues

*In the fourth line you said "will" twice. I love how this poem is going. It's so strong and filled with such a hope and happiness.*

I'll let God become you beautiful love song
As He dances on the lovely piano keys
My heart is sewn with his love
As the piano finishes its last note
You'll know this beautiful love song is what he created

*This is such a beautiful poem. My heart fills warm now. Wow...this was so well done. Keep it up. Nik*

This is amazing. It's very deep and very religous. I for one am Catholic but I don't really believe in God that much but after reading that it makes me wih I did. I love how you described everything. It's really wonderful. 5/5. ~KM~

Wow this is a very well written poem its so elegant and beautiful im not a religous person in fact i hate it but reading this was truely inspirational and really opened up my senses i loved it the structure is brilliant

well done

A few minor changes but other than these few suggestions, youve penned a outstanding write.. so beautiful.. I really loved your metaphor of God being the keys on the piano.. so unique and so beautiful. Reading this poem just really soothes the readers soul and is written with such beauty.. I loved it. It just is soo uplifting and graceful.

"That will rush out in beautiful streams
With dark reds and beautiful blues"
`You shouldnt be so repetitive with beautiful.. be careful. :]

"I'll let God become you beautiful love song"
`your not your.. again watch your repetivness of 'beautiful' a synoymn for beautiful should be used.. so that you can eliminate this repetitiveness

"You'll know this beautiful love song is what he created"
`Repetiveness again with beautiful..

Your poem flows so nicely but with your repetitiveness of beautiful I think that really hurt the poem towards the end. Try and eliminate that desire to repeat a word, it will really help with the flow in the long run.

Well done however. I really enjoyed this write, the metaphor was awesome.

5/5.

Temps.
Beyond a Poets Mind

Wow, this one is deep...
Yes, you R a deep thinker.

Nice work. So deep and so beautiful. Youve done a good job at painting an image in the readers head, its very descriptive. Very well done. 5/5

Thats a beautiful poem,

Very well written. Love the whole poem and very good title.