I though your poem was pretty good, the ending paragraph was my favourite..

So no matter how much you tell me "Don't be scared"
I'm still going to be afraid you won't always be there
But for you baby i will try
I just want you to always be near by

It stuck out the most for me, if you get time have a look at some of my poems and let me know what you think and give me any tips that you might have.. thanx

Hey there,
Wow just WOW! God, I would give anything to be that girl you are talking about! You really know how to treat her good! You are one in a million! I loved how your words you used and how the poem flowed! You have a truly amazing talent! I am sorry to hear bout you and Laura! But, I wish you the best of luck with her! Cause, by all the poems I have read so far of yours she seems something truly special to you and makes you really happy! I can't wait to read more of your poems!!! Keep up the amazing job! Lots Of Love!!!

-Carrie-

P.s. I wish there were more guys out there like you!!! = )