Comments : I Could Tell You...

  • 14 years ago

    by Exostosis

    The poem doesnt suck..silly...those few lines say alot......about how the feelings bite you within....how the heart aches...smiles being faked...its beautiful..shows the pain...like the pen bleeding your feelings on a paper ..and the paper burning of that pain,so hard to take. . .

    great work...effort is seen...

    keep writing ....keep inspiring <3

    peace~

  • 14 years ago

    by Andrew

    I think this poem clearly spelt what you were feeling at that time, a feeling of hurt a feeling of anger, a feeling of rejection and a lost loves revelation. There is emotion writen in all the sentences you wrote, they all complemented each other. You used really strong expressions in this piece, for example "...to be stuck in rewind and I wake in this hell hole ". Hows how much you cling to your past and how much life at the moment has nothing to be smiled about. This was nice, the flow is not so "perfect" but you definately touched me with this one. Keep up.

  • 14 years ago

    by Krayz Lyfe

    No this poem is awesome like most ive read of yours. i also can relate but this is what i think ppl suck and mostly u cant count on anyone but yourself. i know depressing thought but that sentence is the story of my life!! but seriously i really did like the poem it was simple but yet said a lot to me anyway so keep it up

  • 14 years ago

    by Hopeless Romantic

    First off, thanks for stopping by and commenting on my poem. :)
    I enjoyed reading this alot. You did a great job of conveying what was weighing on your heart and mind. That always makes for a good read. keep it up!
    Hopeless Romantic

  • 14 years ago

    by myblackfairytale

    Hey this poem doesn't suck. It was really good. It shows exactly what you were feeling and the fact that you expressed that so well id amazing. Keep up the awesome work. x

  • 14 years ago

    by victoria

    Amazing poem

  • 14 years ago

    by Kianna

    This poem doesn't suck! this is exactly how i feel about my life...5/5
    keep up the good work and i hope you feel better

    ~KiKi

  • 14 years ago

    by UnToLd TrUtH

    Well it definitely doesn't suck! I loved it because you are just writing what you feel and letting it out the only way you can.
    You did a wonderful job and I really liked it.
    5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Beautiful Disaster

    This poem puts me at a loss of words.
    it was so full of emotion that i would relate to.

    "Sometimes I look in the mirror
    To see this ugly face
    Cold tears stream down my skin
    Why won't this scars fade?"

    that is by far my favorite part.
    this was beautifully written.
    well done
    -->Jess<--

  • 14 years ago

    by mzlovehate

    If I wasn't in this situation at the present moment I would write more but the truth is...
    I feel this way but I somewhat told the guy these similar words yesterday

  • 14 years ago

    by Bria

    Gurl r u high........that poem was GREAT

  • 14 years ago

    by Sweet Disposition

    This is a really powerful write, i especially love this stanza :

    I could tell you I was hurt
    But that wouldn't say enough
    Could tell you about the pain
    But I'd be saying too much.

    Good work again.

  • 14 years ago

    by Tom Swart

    The only thing that sucks is that giant sucking sound Ross Perot spoke about when it came to the North American Free Trade Agreement (NAFTA), I don't think anyone could find any similarities here. I think that this poem of yours was a real gift to people like me who have just discovered you and your works. I think you are wise beyond your years and if you can write and feel these thoughts now I can only imagine what the future will bring. I really like your style of writing!!! once more I can say "Bravo" and mean it. There are so many poets that pale in the shadow of your poems.