Let Love Rain Down

Fantastic! Well done -you should be very proud of a brilliant piece of work. The rhyming in this is also terrific.

5/5
Chinsxx

Thanks temps much appreciated :-)

'This is the season of rain
Will love be in the air'
`I'm guessing youre referring to the season of summer here? I like how you didnt really come out and say it although its rather obvious. You let the reader infer.

'Will this rain bring us together
Or will the rain bring pain and fear'
`I dont think you need to keep being extremely repetitive with rain.. just simply say.. 'Will this bring us together, or will it bring pain and fear' - I think the reader understands taht youre referring to the rain here, 'cause you already said it above.

'It is the thunderstorm of life
Electricity is in the air'
`I notice youre being quite repetitive with your words, dont repeat air here.. at least I personally wouldnt.

'The eye of the storm has passed
So you know the end is drawing near
So we can start a new beginning
We can start anew'
`I like how you are listing your options as to what may/could happen.. [ie. new beginning and starting anew.]

'So i think i'll start by saying
Baby i love you
But will that be enough'
`Capitolize your i's.. other than that I can see that youre beginning to open your heart up to this person.. I'm hoping you release some pure emotions.. I always like to see that in poetry.

'Or should i flood you with my love'
`Eh I think flood you with my love is okay, but in a way comes across as cliche, but then again isnt as bad as saying something with tears.

'Should i drown alone in sorrow'
`Pretty cliche but nonetheless expression feeling, emotion, worries, concerns.. ect.

'Help me to help you help me'
`Really really confusing.. rephrase this, although I know what youre saying. Too many helps in one line.

'Let us make Love...Rain down'
`Wonderful ending I actually really liked it.

Sorry for the harsh critique..but a good poem.. just some revising and itll be even better.

Nice work.