Comments : OMG ITS A CLASS 4 HURRICANE RUUUUUUN

  • 14 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    This was a very pleasurable and interesting write, short but full of meaning and power.

    "The footsteps of a god as he strides through the sky.
    the clashing of titans,
    a final breath before they die."

    I love your style of writing, so refreshing and easy to read. Excellent rhyming and the whole concept of this is so cool. Your wording is flawless and depicts so much imagery, you have a lot of talent, I can tell just from these lines.

    "the noise alone monumental, indescribable, simply divine."

    I like these descriptions, just this line was full enough of meaning and vivid imagery.

    "and blood falls from the heavens in a jagged white line."

    I liked the unique way you worded it, and in the end I wanted more. I wish you expanded more on this, it was that good. I didn't like the title, I thought it could be more eye-catching but hey, its your poem.

    Wonderful work, a joy to read.

    5/5 from me, take care and God Bless!

    ~MaryAnne