Comments : Shatter

  • 10 years ago

    by Not Enough

    I think this is a well-written piece. But it siezes to capture my interest. I'm not all for these types of poems. I find that when you try to word things differently and try to make it "unique" that it just flows away from the point. But that's just my opinion, others may love the poem.

    Soda E>

  • 10 years ago

    by Ray Smallshaw

    I do not think this is well written I know it is. A wonderful metamorphic poem. Particularly love the ballet dancer lines,

    The hearts a ballet dancer
    twirling magnificently
    emotions run astray
    falling down so blindly

    as watching ballet is one of my passions and it left me feel breathless with its feeling

    I know that feeling and the end of your poem encapsulated it in you last lines fantastically,

    dark couldn't dampen this
    the sun could not outshine
    beating bloodfilled heart
    joyfilled chest; "he's mine"

    only mine finished "she's mine".
    excellent and totally impressed 5/5 Ray S

  • 10 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    The imagery blends with the free flow to make this a very enjoyable read

    you have a great vocabulary

    great poem