I think this is a well-written piece. But it siezes to capture my interest. I'm not all for these types of poems. I find that when you try to word things differently and try to make it "unique" that it just flows away from the point. But that's just my opinion, others may love the poem.

Soda E>

I do not think this is well written I know it is. A wonderful metamorphic poem. Particularly love the ballet dancer lines,

The hearts a ballet dancer
twirling magnificently
emotions run astray
falling down so blindly

as watching ballet is one of my passions and it left me feel breathless with its feeling

I know that feeling and the end of your poem encapsulated it in you last lines fantastically,

dark couldn't dampen this
the sun could not outshine
beating bloodfilled heart
joyfilled chest; "he's mine"

only mine finished "she's mine".
excellent and totally impressed 5/5 Ray S

The imagery blends with the free flow to make this a very enjoyable read

you have a great vocabulary

great poem