A battle that she had won against myself
Suddenly I was worthless in the likes of you
Loss in all means of my untainted world

*I love these lines. You use amazing diction and I love the use of periodic syntax. I felt you did a wonderful job with expressing your pain and anger here. This was a very emotional piece. Keep it up and thanks for the comment ^.^ Nik*

TY for commenting on my poems btw :) I find your poems to be way more mature than my. I use such simple words to describe things, where as you use a mixture of complicated and unique words in yours XD

A very descriptive piece. There is emotion in poetry and quite clearly a lot in this particular piece.

It's almost raw and down to the bone and if not for the metaphors but they were great with the flow of the poem. Using words such as Stained, affliction & inhibits. These are great words to use in a poem thats full of emotional anger. You told me that you wish you could write better but this Melissa is one of your good reads. I haven't gone through all of your material yet but it this piece where your choice of words really do play the part well in your message and warning of love.

I enjoyed this piece and due to my personality, likes and dislikes, I award it 5/5