Wow, that was a powerful write that was sad. If this is true, I'm sorry to hear that, you can PM me if you want and you can always talk to me regardless of the situation, I'll be here.

Overall nice write, flow was good, structure was good. It was a bit long though, but since it is supposed to be performed I suppose that is okay.

Keep up the good work.

Peace and Love, Joe

My anger has grown towards you
Cause you want me to feel sorry
I feel sorry now
For EVER giving you a chance!

*This was my favorite part. I can really relate to what you are feeling here. I think this was one of your best Ashley. You really put your heart into this. It seems so raw and angry, but there's a lingering sadness as well. I really liked this one. Great work hun. ^.^ Keep it up. Nik*

Wow Ashley...

This was my favorite part, & very true.

To get love you have to show it
To show it you have to care
To care you have to have a heart

Extremely powerful words and definatly a very personal write to you. I could feel the frustation and anger and that youre really fed up, if you ever need soemone to talk to I'm here as well..

Omg Ashley,
This poem is so powerful. So much anger shown. You're saying you're done, you've had it. It's very well written just really strong and so emotional. I love it!! I'm sorry you're in this situation, I wish I could help. You know I'm always here for you.
Keep writing, you're amazing!!!

<3 Katiekins 5/5

Wow, Wow i have no idea what to say, the anger in your poem was so powerful. I fully loved it. Great work.

Now this is the type of poetry i really like, long and very emotional. i hate how so many people write generic crap, you know four line stanzas with an aabb rhyme scheme and filed with cliches. you know where they use 20 lines saying how they think they should feel instead of how they realy feel. but this poem was trully amazing. i could tell you put alot of effort and soul into it. it is so sad but nevertheless hauntingly beautiful. and the flow in it was amazing. i read it aloud and it just sounded so good. i also write my poems to be read aloud so i know what i am talking about. and the ending .. well i just dont have no words for it. i wish i could give you more than a 5 for this

This was beautiful and truly deep! keep it up and never stop writing! would you please read and comment on my "scars" poem?? i would love some feedback.

I LOVE THIS POEM... It shows your raw emotions. I enjoyed reading it. It was honest and heartbreaking. So many people will be able to read this and think that you wrote it for them.

Well written

x

I understand how you feel<3 but hunny u should feel srry for her because she missed to know the most talnted beautiful girl<3 ur work is amazing so don't let this hold you down keep it up<3