What happens next? Haha! Very good write, it kept me intrigued. I'd love to hear more of this! You've got a talent, actually making this into a poem instead of written porn. Congrats, not many people do this! :D

5/5

Keep writing,
Emily :)

Damn girl! this poem is great!!

Haha. i like the ending. i love this. kept me very interested. i would like to hear what happens. you should make a part 2 if you want too to keep your viewers reading. good job.

Wow, really good.

I loved it. I couldn't stop reading! :)
5/5

Loved it! damn you can right....good memories im sure...
5/5

Its really good, you should write a part 2

Wonderful poem .
Keep writinq .
Return the favor ?
Messaqe meh sometime (:
5/5

Wonderful poem but like many of the others I'm wondering what happens next lol. I like the ending though because it keeps the reader wanting more. Very well written, 5/5. Em

Dang it! why did your dad have to interrupt!!!??? lol nice poem. love it

Yummy lol
keep up the good work!
5/5
*KiKi

I like your poems. I think that we think the same way. Does that make sense? Anyways keep on writing.

Luv diz poem

Great poem but did u really do that? jw

Lol yeah....

HOT! I think I need a shower...

I like the rhyme to this. Simple.
The subject is great and hard to write about. I love how you did it though!

Great Job!!!

Dang loved it got me well you know lol