This was amazing girl. Your emotions were really strong in this piece.. but you should stop and realize nobody is perfect and we're all special in our own ways -- but you did a great job using the lyric! Well donee.

5/5 (:

Your special to me hun!!

You sparkle like distant stars
I burn out like tired candles.

these wer my favorite lines

great job

Whoa i love that ending
"So I let envy paint me green
as red painted your body."
that was beautiful i loved it
but i have to agree with the comment ashley made...
"You sparkle like distant stars
I burn out like tired candles."
those were my favourite lines in the whole poem
and the last line was a perfect way to end it
very powerful and very in keeping with the way the poem went
and the sadness and darkness oozed out of this poem so heavily i felt like i belonged in an asylum... :D
it was great :)

Keenan

"I wake up in this skin of mine
and I'm deeply saddened."

I really like the opening line, I think many of us have felt this kind of sadness, unhappy with who we are and what we see.

The ending stanza was my favorite part, it is so dark and eerie, it really made me cringe but stop and think as well.

You have done a nice job here, it was an enjoyable read.

I really like the opening line it brings me in and it reminds me of what we all feel about ourselves

"I wake up in this skin of mine
and I'm deeply saddened."

the line is so grasping the whole poem was great job 5/5!!!!!!!!!

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Envy is so harsh but I think we all do it.

A well phrased poem , touched with sadness and guilt.
A very enjoyable read

"So I let envy paint me green"

this is some line that garnishes the poem or lets says is the touch to the poem....i love this line very much....

eh, you are special ...dont you doubt it silly...^^,

This poem is so creepy but i can relate to it... my favorite kind of poems are those that linger in my mind. it was a mouthwatering poem that left me thirsty for more keep it up! 5/5