Comments : Not Just A Nightmare

  • 14 years ago

    by babblingxbrooke

    That's terrible, and I'm very sorry.
    Aside from that, it was a great write. very strong, and it flowed well. good job!

  • 14 years ago

    by babblingxbrooke

    That's terrible, and I'm very sorry.
    Aside from that, it was a great write. very strong, and it flowed well. good job!

  • 14 years ago

    by Faten

    Wow. . i uh dont really know what to say. if that happened im sry. as for the poem, i like it, it was well written and flowed nicely.

  • 14 years ago

    by ibelievedhim

    Wow that reminds me of my poem thanks for the nightmares! it's so scary if that happened to you, but i know what you're going through if it's true. i'm so sorry. this is a perfect description, the imagery was amazing. i felt like i was you. the flow was great and the word choice was just deadly. 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by iFallToPieces

    Wow, i dont know what to say this was just wow.
    Very deep, and great rhyme, i hope the stroy isnt true tho, if you ever need to talk you can pm me anytime.
    But the poem was great, great rhyme,flow and structure just a brilliant write.

    Great Work
    5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Aish

    Wow-that was rly rly rly intense. very well done though.
    an easy 5/5-love the power of the last 2 lines.
    great work
    xxxx

  • 14 years ago

    by Yours Truly xO

    This was sad, but written well. the way everything flowed together was incredible. i liked it (=

  • 14 years ago

    by Tammi

    Wow so sad and true great words u used and such a picture u painted with ur words great work and I hope this made u feel better to write about it 5/5

    Tammi,

  • 14 years ago

    by Courtney Hough

    *Held down by invisible ropes,
    The pain too much to bare,
    Im crying out for help,
    But no-one seems to care.*

    WOW jus WOW i mean it was ood the beging reaelly drags you in and the end is way good to 10/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Josh

    That's pretty powerful...wow

  • 14 years ago

    by Kuro

    I don't think i need to tell you how shocking this is. it fills my heart with sorrow, fear and anger.

  • 14 years ago

    by FindingHarmonyInYurCries

    I dont know why you say you arent a good writer .. That was very well written. You have the fear and pain to make people turn their heads .. Keep it up, hun. :) xx 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Courtney Hough

    He flashes me a sly smile,
    As he unzips his old, ripped jeans,
    Im still paralized from terror,
    While ontop of me he leans.

    I hear my heart thumping,
    Inside my beaten chest,
    I just want to wake up!
    And forget about the rest.

    The torturous minutes pass on by,
    Feeling like years to me.
    I wish it was JUST a nightmare,
    But its a f**king memory.

    oh my god if this happend i am so so sorry i know right on how you feel here hun.......this same thing happened to me to but im always herer k

    great poem deep draws you in 10/5

  • 14 years ago

    by xXHunnyGurlXx

    Wow... this poem was very pulling, it had perfect flow & description & your wording was just amazing... it gave me goosebumps & shivers!! I would have to say i enjoyed readin this poem but only for the rhythmicc flow not for the stpry line..

    & darl im hoping with all my heart that you have just made this up.. But if not im forever sorry & wish you all my blessings xxxx

  • 14 years ago

    by Hollymariee

    .. I am speechless . The emotions I felt probably could have come close to the victim's .. POWERFUL ending .. Perfect flow , amazing . Just .. Amazing .