Eternal

by XXVAMXXPIEXOX   Jul 13, 2009


The sight of never ending time
Where life can be immortal
She took up her knife
Stabbing into her friends heart and liver
She drank a thousand people blood
Wishing she could be immortal
Like the book she read
But it turns out
She was wrong instead
Her hands are now cuffed
And her eyes are blinded
She sat at the chair
Smiling like a devil
No doesn't fear death
Cause she thought her immortal is here
She smile even wider
When the priest set his prayer
Finally the plug is pulled
As she laugh and scream
There is her eternal life
Lay in the deep pit hell.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Corruption

    I found this one a little harder to read
    i think maybe you should read over this
    and fix the grammar mistake and some of the other...
    i can put out a few i noticed but there are abit too many for me to point them all out...
    "Where live can be immortal"
    i think you meant life instead of live...
    'Her hands are now cuff"
    i am pretty sure this line should be put into past tense so the cuff should be changed to cuffed...
    there are some others
    but other then those few little mistakes i think this is a good poem
    good job

    Keenan