Can't think of a title.

by ABrookeD   Jul 16, 2009


An endless search,
For a beacon of hope.
Prayers gone unanswered,
No hand for me to hold.

A distinct look into the future,
Though plans are never set in stone
I've seen the life I've always dreamed of.,
But its not one to call my own.

Never have i known,
This feeling, like a trance.
A bubble close to bursting,
In a good way, not bad. (i'm not sure i like this line)

Floating on cloud nine,
Time to be brought back down to earth.
Before the head i once had on my shoulders,
Comes crashing down first.

**I threw this poem together in about 20-30 minutes. I don't know how good it is, or if it will make sense to anyone, but i put a lot of feeling into it. Any feedback would be great.

I like brutal honesty.
Don't be afraid to give me some tips on how to make it better.

Oh and any title suggestions?

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  • 14 years ago

    by katee

    This is really sweet. i dont have an idear for a title but this has alot of feeling. The line your not sure you like is perfect. dont change a thing. this is great. :)