Comments : Little Girl

  • 14 years ago

    by Ingrid

    This is really well written Katie!

    Feel you slipping, so far away
    Words on my lips, I don't say
    Hide in my shell, need you to see
    That I am what he made me to be.

    The worst thing that can happen is that we lose what we have in the present due to things in the past.
    If we allow it to happen, he will have won completely;)
    Turn away girl, grab the hand stretched out to climb over the threshold of today.


    5/5 Ingrid
    ps: change you name right away.

  • 14 years ago

    by ImNoTpErFEct

    Beautiful. x

  • 14 years ago

    by Saving Grace

    Sh*t. That is really good. I can relate...alot. You did an AMAZING job at expressing yourself. Perfect use of wording and it flowed really well. Great work girl. 5/5 xox

  • 14 years ago

    by Gness

    Its sad what people can do to you and not even feel or see what they did. All in all its a sadly written but very powerful it sends a great message to those out there who went under the same situation.

  • 14 years ago

    by Hologram


    That is one truly one of the best poems I've ever read.
    You poured so much into it.

    I love it, honestly!!

    Definatly 10/10

    Great work, keep it up.

  • 14 years ago

    by xXDurrTYSOutHXx

    "To express in ways literature can only imagine is a poets way to paint a picture". Comment back on my very own artistic paintings...

  • 14 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    Very well expressed, you have great flow and your use of wording is awesome. I enjoyed this very much and will read more from you
    Well done

  • 14 years ago

    by Em

    A wonderful written poem. I liked how you expressed that we lose things in the present because of things that happened in the past, sad but true. 5/5, Em x