I love your poem I get your message it better to live and die than to live and watch your lived ones die

You got really a great way of thinkin and presentin ur thoughts in ur poems ! ;)

I like the way you write your thoughts in poetry. It's better to die than to watch your loved ones die but they would have to watch us die. I don't know which I'd deal with more because either way I'd be leaving them. Well written, 5/5. Em

Im speechless....this is exactly wat i think. very good job sweetie. 5/5

*Val

This is very true... and topic that I have pondered a great deal.

Am I going to live forever... as in after I die
and my spirit moves on.

Do we live for ever?

I actually hope so..

thing is... if we dont..... would we know it???

My only suggestion would be to work on the structure of this poem....sometimes you had line breaks when the thought still continued, that is the only thing I noticed.

Not sure I liked the "yeah" in this piece- it didn't add any extra emphasis...but questioning "why" does. It shows: are you willing to move on and leave behind those you love?

Good points though- we can't always think eternal life would be the greatest gift. it isn't natural, what would we gain?

Please keep writing.
God's blessings on you!