Comments : Stand with me O'child.

  • 14 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "Stand with me O'child,"

    This line opened this piece up well, it caught my eye. I liked "O'child", that was unique and different.

    "broken down and beaten.
    Healer of your heart,
    is here to save you now."

    Very well-penned and expressed, this really struck me.

    "Free yourself from fear,
    for I've come to give you peace."

    What inspiring words, the message you portray is so clear here.

    "No other could withstand,
    the wrath of glories feast."

    Shouldn't "glories" be "glory's"?

    I did like how you said "withstand".

    "Hold on tightly,
    never let go.
    I understand you'll drift,
    but I hope you'll never leave me.
    I'm here for you for always,
    waiting for you, dear."

    What sweet and heartfelt words you have written here, such inspiration.

    "Just stand here with me,
    and I promise life will come out clear."

    A great ending, filled with promise and hope.

    Althought the flow could have been improved, the message and hope portrayed in this poem was outstanding. I really enjoyed this piece, keep it up!

    ~MaryAnne