Return to me

The only one I'm loving so true
*I would change this to "the one keeping my love true" that seems to flow better and makes more sense than the way you have it.*

have i got a chance to say i love you
have i got a chance to say i care
*How you worded that really bothers me. I would change it to "Have had a chance to say I love you" and so on. That sound so much better to me*

your the one i want to hold
*You used the wrong word here. It should be "you're"*

return to me, baby ill be
*You had a pattern of saying "I will be" I liked that. I think you shoud say it here instead of "I'll"*

still tears came in your eyes
*I don't think "in" sounds right here. maybe "to" works better.*

my heart and romance
return to me
*I like your ending. it's simple, but I know what you mean. I think this was a sweet poem with alot of emotions. I hope she came back to you ^.^ Good work hun. Nik*

It a very touching piece...i enjoyed reading it, ur words tell a story...
keep up the good work xox