Comments : I am the one who...

  • 14 years ago

    by Angel Tears

    This was beautiful. I could clearly feel the emotion behind the words. I would only suggest a few changes:
    I am the one whos heart was broken
    "whos" should be "who's"
    and
    i am the one who cried the tears
    "i" should be "I"

    Other than that, an excellent piece :)

  • 14 years ago

    by Em

    This is written beautiful and shows the pain you've been through like I said if we haven't felt it we will eventually. 5/5, Em