One's soul can only
take so much--
but mine...has nine lives;
it will persevere,
rather than surrender.

^^
You compare yourself to a cat here:) A cat is a strong animal that always lands on its feet, hence the nine lives.
I would lose the dots in the third line, I find them distractive somehow.

It's grasp is of concrete
strength; optimism traces
the edges of this fighting
heart, negativity is invisible
in the form of ashes.

^^
Negativity in the form of ashes: you burn you bad memories. Good, looking back in anger or remorse would only tie you down to your past.

Despite the burden
of intricate roadblocks
tossed unexpectedly
in front of lively aspirations,
nothing will damage these
tangible feelings I withold;

^^
Roadblocks are there to make us stronger and they are there for every person, hun. Only the tough survive..life is all but a cake walk and no one has it easy..

I will not abandon their
pureness; but stay true
to them as I always have.
Allowing them to drift away,
would mean letting you go
as well; that's the last
thing I need.

^^
It is not clear to the reader who the other person is. You only talked about your own feelings throughout the poem. but I gather from the context it is either your inner true self or someone you do not want to give up on, someone dear to you.
The last line is a big turn off, Temps! It is in no way poetic, more a line in a diary..
Why not something like" that will never be me"?

A good poem, a venting poem I feel...

In times of hardship you should always turn inwards to remind yourself where you real strength lies: deep within the core of you, where you communicate with our Lord.

Well done, girl:)

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

Temps
Nice poem....there is so much hope yet I feel a touch of sadness also.
Great job!
Take Care
Cindy

Very inspiring poem..
U r excellent..

Someimes in life we have to let go even though that is not what we want. Souls have more than nine lives and only leave us when we died and are reborn in another of God's creatures, human or otherwise. Well done.

I liked the attitude in this piece Temps, and it's somewhat...different for you.

'One's soul can only
take so much--
but mine...has nine lives;
it will persevere,
rather than surrender. '

I don't like the 'nine lives' reference, it can be considered cliche, and you could deliver your optimism better here; whereas the last lines communicate in the way the rest of your poem should. No need for the elipsis here too.

'It's grasp is of concrete
strength'

This doesn't make sense because of it's ambiguity, what is the soul 'grasping'?

'optimism traces
the edges of this fighting
heart'

If the 'heart' is relevant, why is it brought up at the beginning of the poem, when the narrator is describing the soul? The transition is awkward and doesn't follow, it'd be better off in it's own stanza.

'negativity is invisible
in the form of ashes.'

How can invisible be in a form?

'
Despite the burden
of intricate roadblocks
tossed unexpectedly
in front of lively aspirations, '

This is really well put; well done. The only problem I have is the two lines that follow:

'nothing will damage these
tangible feelings I withhold.'

Tangible doesn't really...say what you want it to, because of it's connotations, it's a case of changing that adjective because it feels like an anomalie in that stanza.

'I refuse to abandon their
pureness'

Don't like it at all. Very clumsy. It's clear what you're talking about but it's off-putting.

'Allowing them to drift away,
means letting you go
as well;'

Allowing something to drift away IS letting them go, so it seems pointless to repeat it

' that's the last
scenario I want to come true.'

Is kind of a different tone; don't mention it 'coming true', since the narration has been optimistic all the way through, end it with something to sum up the 'optimistic' thoughts that you've shared throughout the poem; the ending undermines most of it, in my opinion.

I like it :)
I haven't been reading your poetry for a long time..this one came really good temps :)
Just a tiny thing to criticize:
"It's grasp is of concrete "
^
should be "its" not "it's".

Well done temps :) I loved your ending.
Write on~

That was melancholic but nice to read. I enjoyed the descriptiveness of it.

I really have no suggestions for this piece Temps, I thought it was a very different write, and the idea caught my eye. You expressed yourself very well and I love the inspiring moments in it. Your vocabulary was great here too, as some words I thought were very uncommon. A pleasure to read a new one, keep growing as a poetess and person.

Take care and God bless you, Child of God!

~MaryAnne

Excellent poem of i love it!