Joe,
I know how personal this poem is to you, and I think you have done a wonderful job. Beautiful write about a beautiful person.

This is such a beautiful dedication to her and I know she would have been proud. The form seems very challenging and I really haven't seen many on here, so excellent job for using this form. I have no suggestions, this piece just portrays such sadness and it breaks the reader's heart to hear your words and your emotions. You expressed yourself well though and the descriptions given made this poem so alive and real. A beautiful write, never stop writing..

God bless and take care!

~MaryAnne

Uhmmm WOW? Yes!! You did an amazing job with this, I can only imagine the sadness and emotions that ran through you as you wrote this. But, let me tell you it came out to be a masterpiece. I must say your last two stanzas were very strong, the last one stood out to me the most. This was so very well done, Glosa Verse is not a easy form, but I think you pulled it off amazingly. What a poem.. so heart breaking. :( You did great though, unbelieveable! You should be so proud of yourself for this. I will most definatly nominate it tmrw. Well done Joe!

This is probably one of the neatest poetry styles I've ever come across. I'll have to try one. :]

You did a great job of this, everything flowed easily and the words and metaphors used to describe the emotions were perfect. I especially loved the part about the ivy, I loved that line.

5/5 and a nomination my friend. :]

You did an excellent job on a form that seems really hard! I love your choice of songs to base it on...a beautiful song! Awesome!

And it only hurts when I'm breathing,
my heart only breaks when it's beating,
my dreams only die when I'm dreaming
so, I hold my breath to forget."

^^ this was an amazing line. it really brought tears to my eye. :)