Comments : Death, take me

  • 14 years ago

    by Countess of Monte Cristo

    A quite dark poem, which not everyone might understand. The message that this piece is trying to convey is definitely familiar to me, I've been in that situation where i begged death to come.

    But, in the end, this life is beautiful. And sometimes we have to hit rock bottom to really begin to notice that life is beautiful.

  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    You are my friend
    And I long to taste of you

    *I would change this to "I long to tatse you" That sounds better to me and doesn't seem so wordy.*

    You are my life
    I want to breath you in

    *"breath" should be "breathe"*

    You are my home
    And I long to be with you
    You are my rest
    Forever will I find my peace with you

    *I really liked this part. It's sad but written so softly. This wasn't my favorite from you, I feel your love poems are your best work but this was good. I like how you repeated "Tonight" that was very clever and shows me that you are determine to die at that point and time. Great work dear. Nik*

  • 14 years ago

    by Mr Rhee

    The way we want to live often matches the way we want death. There are reasons for living, and very few reasons for death. "A way of life," is what we strive for. A reason to die...is what a lot of us discover within ourselves. A great poem. Such talent. I hope I got the idea right. Thanks for the good read.

  • 12 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Wow!