Disappear

Great word selection for this piece, your words were filled with good vivid imagery, which i admire. great job

True this could possibly be about war, but I think its about the Devil. How he tries to manipulate us and change our beliefs from good to evil. How once he has a hold of us theres no going back. Now he see's all the lives he's ruined and all the lives he's taken and he doesn't ask for foregiveness for he knows it won't be given. He only asks for a second chance to go about things another way? Anyways great job excellent piece it leaves the reader with many questions. 5/5

Emotion, phrasing, perfection are all in this poem, congratz and continue,
such a dark poem but well done!
5/5
David

"It's dark all around
and the light from above
has vanished from my face
leaving me in hard, cold pain".

Reading these first lines lots of thoughts came to my mind. I could feel the emptiness, sadness and loneliness.

"Instead the blood of lost souls
stain my body with condemned doom
and memories of what once was".
This tells a deep regret, something that one had to life with for the rest of their lives.

"My whole life,
I've cursed every being
that has crossed my path".
When one is not in perfect harmony with his/her being, then they can't appreciates what they see and all they crave for is transqulity.

"Through my touch,
they turned to dust
and drifted away".
This is painful, but you're free, because your concience had giving you this freedom.

"Just my presence alone
sent them to their inevitable downfall
and my unparalleled punishment".

Well some people cannot tolerate others, most times by things they heard.

"At everyone's end,
lurked mine on the other side".

Well this shows, your best friend is your ownself. Most time we lost confident in humankind, but there are genuine people out there, take it as i told you.

"Their loved ones all burned
with the passion of hate
like wildfire through the forest".

I can feel so loneliness, cruelty.

"I live now and forever
in a cave of solitude
and the shadow of my death". Well i doubt we can truly happy being alone. Yes it brings peace to the mind, but the heart left craving for something.

"If I could,
I would satisfy them
by restoring their faith
along with the lives I took".

Well taking someone's life away, should not be for personal pleasure. I could feel some searching for forgiveness....

"I ask not for forgiveness,
but an opportunity for redemption
and the start of new life".

Well you cannot find the redemption unless you feel no one had nothing against you. Your concience is free, yet in your heart you're still searching how to turn another chapter of your existance. Very well written, sad yet at the end things will turned out well. 5/5, keep on writing it helps to free one's being, kel.

Gasttlee
This is such a piece filled with sadness and dispair. Yet there is a feeling of maybe some hope.
Great job on this dark poem.
Take care
Cindy