Good poem hun :) I think it was simple and well written. Keep it up. Nik

Wow, this was reaalllyyy good. it had a good structure and flow. everything went together very well. i liked it alot. I can relate to it alot as well.

Excellent poem, very well written, very expressive and strong, powerful emotion in each word.

Wow. This is probably the first poem I've come across that I can't really critique. Haha, that's amazing.
You did really well, the emotion expressed is done so flawlessly, the flow is great. It was simple, but it wasn't boring, and kept my attention. I wish I could say more, but honestly I can't, you've left me speechless (:

Ughh. I have been "told too much" as well. it's not a fun thing to be lied too, or to be disappointed in someone. I loved this poem, it spoke the raw truth. well done! :]

5/5

This was a great write. The flow was superb as well as the rhymes making it a delightful poem to read. I also love the message you shared, it's a rather simple feeling. Discomfort, uneasiness something everyone can relate to.

"You tell me I should seek help
and I know that you are trying,
but the help you want me to seek
I am continuously denying."
^This verse really stuck out for me. It's something many can relate to, someone telling us to relax to trust, but we are unable to let ourselves do so. You expressed this feeling very well, in simple words without going on and on with verse after verse.

"You tell me I can trust you
but I'm scared to say I do,
'cause lately I've been feeling
that I've told too much to you. "
^A great ending. You refer back to the title, which is a common but effective use. I loved how you said this, that you were simply uneasy and untrusting as well as unsure. This makes it seem much more real, that you find you can't trust the person, although you wished you did.

This was a superb poem, the words you had used was straight forward, to the point and unlike many did not hide your words with numerous metaphors. It's a good unique change from many poems. I also loved the simple emotion you chose to use, and elaborate on. Not something as vague as merely being sad, or upset. But you told us exactly what it was, told us why in a way that was vague and yet yours.

Deep sprang to mind, if you want to move forward with your life at sometime you will have to trust someone a very difficult choice if you have been through the ringer in the past but what have you to loose? Another thought provoking poem nicely meter and full of feeling 5/5 Ray S

It says exactly what u mean to say. precise, and so real. anyone could relate.

Precise, and so real. all of us have been here at some point in time. it sure brought back some memories. good poem.

Very nice work :) I'm sure plenty of people can relate. The flow was excellent and and you had good structure.

Keep it up :)
5/5

I can totally relate to this.. i love everything about this poem. It has such strong emotion, is well structured and flows really well. The ending was incredible and finished it off perfectly.

This is incredible :) you are a really talented writer :)

5/5 for suree

This poem is very lyrical with a great rhythm and rhyme I can easily relate and believe many others will too

Love this poem, simple yet has a lot of meaning to it, shows very well how we can all tell people things and it makes us feel so much better but we later arent so sure we should have told them. amazing read 5/5! keep it up and stay strong!

Jacs
xxx

A beautifully written poem with perfect rhyme and flow! I can definitely relate, after just reading that poem my mind instantly thought of the people I tend to open up to and I cannot deny a chill did run up my spine.

Great job!

5/5

Write on!

I have been there. I completely understand how u feel. Personally I've never told any1 everything about me, and sometimes that's the best thing. Having some1 2 open up 2 and feel comfortable enough 2 do that is an amazing privilege that I think a lot of ppl take advantage of. But regarding ur poem I gave it a 4/5. I thought that it was really good. No it didn't knock my socks off kind of excellent but it was good. I felt how u felt bcuz I was there but @ the same time I needed more feeling. Like 4 ppl that have never felt that way, I don't think that they would have 2 much feeling through that poem. But that's just my opinion and it doesn't take away from ur poem as a whole.

When I talk to you
I don't feel so alone.
^ these too lines need one or two syllables added , because they're much shorter than the rest and throw off the flow a little bit .

Your poem held alot of emotion, and I think you did a really good job . I think a lot of people can relate too because everyone is scared of sharing their secrets . 5/5

The title however is original it seemed kind of dull to me, it didnt draw me to this.

Now looking at the first verse, it seems to have the childish limerick beat to it, which when used correctly can have a rather sadistic twist that slaps readers in the face, it would seem like your reading childrens poetry until something just gets gruesome or unexspected. Just basic ryhming, nothing inparticularly special or original, rather good beat and flow. Like above normal.

Here it is already slapping me in the face in the second verse with a sudden turn from having someone around you 24/7 to a bad memory or your bad history.The part ryhme between past and harrased i have never seen before, just a little thing that caught my attention.

Back to the happier childish theme, which is alright but you lost the rythm that you had kept going perfectly through verse 1 and 2, just simply add some syllables to the last two lines of this and it would be just as good as the two before it.

Fear is a great climax for a poem, if verse 4 is the climax, and the ryhming was again basic, but then again most of mine is, so theres nothing wrong with it. except the last line is just BARELY out of beat, but its noticable.

verse 5 = deadwood, not needed in verse 4 you said bright light which could be a metaphor for realizing the truth about something which could of been what you were aiming for but if it wasnt then good job regardless, but in my opinion just remove verse 5 and then 4 and 6 would go great together and end the poem with a pang and you incorporated the title perfectly, It was going to be a 3 but just solely the end makes it worth a 4 to me. Again the childish limerick tone was quite original.

Amazing poem i can totally relate and i am almost positive a lot of others can as well, the poem is also very expressive which i like, and the rhyming is spot on 5/5 for this it was a great read!!

Great poem. it had really good flow and the rhyme was kept all the way through it was great. i can relate i think alot of people can i mean there are always those people you think you can trust or you cant help opening up to. still it was really good

Nice. you did an excellent job describing this feeling you have. even though i may not be able to relate, because you described it so well, i can sympathize and i know exactly how you feel. nicely done
~Ben