Comments : Another Sleepless Night

  • 11 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    I enjoyed this poem mostly because it's so easy to relate to. I know for sure that at night when I'm trying to sleep, is the time I also spend doing most of my thinking. I think it's because we have no distractions, nothing to hide the thoughts or the aches, nothing to make us forget.

    "I toss and turn for hours, just hoping for a break
    for sleep to overpower me and numb me from this ache.
    But hours pass, I'm wide awake.. and you're still on my mind
    just waiting for another chance, a sign of any kind."

    ^^ I liked this stanza. I also find sleep to be one of the greatest escapes. Not only is it filled with dreams that you can call your own, but it is like another world, where we can pretend it's like our own... without all the messy stuff. It really is a great tool for numbing.

    An enjoyable piece. :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Matt

    Completely agree with the above, when trying to sleep is when we are at our most vulnerable to our thoughts when we've lost someone we love. Going through the exact same thing now, and i still wake at the time she used to get up every morning, breaks me every day..

    Great work though

  • 11 years ago

    by divine divinity

    Beautiful poem. Such heart ache and love in every well written line. Loved it. Thought the flow was flawless. Excellent poem.

  • 11 years ago

    by Hollow Emotion

    Very well written. The flow was awesome and the stanzas were amazing. Well done!!

    Keep wirting!

  • 11 years ago

    by cici89

    Wow, it was amazing!!!! wonderful job.. I can personally relate to in and that just made it even better to me...Everything just flowed so smoothly and was pieced together so great! The title did give it away a little but for how great the poem was it just completly surpassed that. Great great job 5/5


  • 11 years ago

    by MERCY is never shown

    Ok i think everyone can relate to this because everyone has been or will be broken like that and the vulnerability you show well you seem to capture but a minute in time the moment each nighth when you think how they really are the most beautiful scene when someone is broken and you captured it amazingly

  • 11 years ago

    by Ray Smallshaw

    I hate that people put i instead of I you have once and the poem is excellent and I have voted so 5/5 but the last line for me need a bit of attention (for the strength ) perhaps? Ray S

  • 8 years ago

    by Shadow

    Wow i really liked it. Its amazing! Great flow to it and emotion. Beautiful poem.