This was really good...it really got to me. good work! keep on writing! :)

Another good poem and the feelings of wanting the darkness to stay over the day and not wanting the light to come forth was really good and I liked it a lot. I would have to say that flow and rhyming was good once again throughout the poem so once again good job an I hope you keep on writing.

I liked this, it had a lot of emotion and it went well with the flow, the ryming was amazing and GOOD JOB
**Bri

This poem had a lot of emotion in it .. i absolutly loved it..

That's beautiful! : ) Although I have one suggestion.

<Night after night I stare at the sky
Alive but I wish I could die>

In my opinion, I would change the second line to...

<Alive but wishing I could die>

:) just my opinion. Beautiful piece! So powerful and profound.

5/5

Watch your rhyming. If you need to really strain the lines to fit you'll have to reword. it was enjoyable and you should keep writing, I'd love to hear more.

Hey not bad!!

A very deep write lol. . Full of emotion and distress.

A very deep write lol. . Full of emotion and distress. You have expressed yourself well, and the reader can just enter your pain, Lol. Wanting the darkness to cover the day... these words go so deep, and just touch the readers heart. I also liked your opening line.. how night after night you stare at the sky... it's as if you are looking to it for answers ( I love night time and the sky, when everything is so calm and still.. lol ) This is a well written piece :) and I look forward to reading more of yours! Well done :)

All the best and take care,
Olwin.