Comments : Shall Thee Expel Mercy?

  • 9 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    You seriously impressed me, MaryAnne he he he!

    Woo-eee, to be that young and to have such talent really makes me smile from ear to ear!

    Good work kiddo!

    *hugs*
    5/5 Ingrid WV

  • 9 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    'flaming ice and frigid fire?'
    `I really loved this; I dont have a clue what this kind of writing is called..cant think of it but loved this.

    'extinction amongst all of thy fere's?'
    `What does 'fere's' mean? Looks like the plural form of fears, unless in Old English it is spelled the way you have here, anyway I'm not sure on that one.

    This poem itself was brilliant! I love the Old English--its something different .. as I know youve used it quite a few times lately. Another really great write, with outstanding word choice and ideas. Keep it up.. you are writing some very imprsesive poems lately.

  • 9 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Creative and unique. I love your use of Old English. Overall the word choice was good. An enjoyable read, well worth the time!

  • 9 years ago

    by Sylvia

    I have read this over and over and I agree with the other commenters. I like the way you used old English, the form is good, words are powerful. An excellent write from you. Going in my favorites. Well done.

  • 9 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Well deserved win, sweet girl:)

    Congrats!

    *hugs*

    Ingrid

  • 9 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Wow youre really on a roll --
    well done once again &
    very well deserved.
    (:

  • 9 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    I read this a few times why I didn't comment before I'm not sure. I do that at times get lost in a poem not really knowing what to say.
    But anyway, you have been on my favorite list since I joined. Your poems are beyond simple but complex and enjoyable.
    Congrats on your win, you deserved it a millions times over
    *hugs*

  • 9 years ago

    by Aureus Argentum

    That was beautiful! And the win is well deserved.
    I love the Old English style; I do it myself. I have one suggestion.
    Shouldn't your title be "Shalt Thou Expel Mercy?" It sounds more accurate to me, but then again, just a suggestion :)

    5/5!

  • 9 years ago

    by Corinne

    This is good, but thine and thee and thou is really hackneyed and overdone, and old fashioned, and you don't always use them correctly - No one writes poetry like this anymore.

  • 9 years ago

    by Mr Rhee

    Very well done. I do agree with some of the other comments. Your use of some of the "Worde of Olde," is enjoyable. "Pray tell, your visions of wonderment, and lightment, do agree with jovial constitution, m'Lady." I admire your talent.

  • 9 years ago

    by LadyLk

    I think I quit writing!! My poems are honestly nothing compared to what I am reading!! I love how you're so young yet so witty. Impressive!! You will make it far in life with these skills! You are going in my favourite authors!! 5/5