This poem touches my heart with the intense passion expressed for a love that seems so possible

I usually prefer happy endings of some sort, but I am left with the hope that your would be lover will not read of your death

Aw. althoug it had no structure, (and mostly non of mine do either) i loved it. it was sweret. good job!

ally

I like the last 2 line most out of the whole poem, though ii like reading this i would have threw in more lines, free verse like you. IBE

Hey i rlly like this poem also and i have also been there if u dnt believe me read this (Our exchange
by David johnson) and baby gurl u gotta realize that you are all those things with or with out him and i mean this i know all the adults in ur life already told u this prolly but really the only love and respect that truly matters in this world are self love and respect without this no one else can love and respect you because you wont let them if you dontlove and respect yourself how is someone else gonna i have been thru it i didnt trust anybody for a long time because they told me they loved me it sounded like BS to me because i didnt love myself i thought they were lying you will find tht special someone who treats you good and the way you deserve but befpre you can be with that special person you gotta get urself write figure out what u wnt for yourself and if that person fits in with that and they treat u good then you should prolly be that person lol i am sorry for gabbing your ear off i just see alot of the problems i had a cple years back thru your poems and i wish i would have listened to all the things i am telling you now then when they were told to me

"And when you hear about my death sometime in the near future"

seems like the girl in this is going to commit suicide. it was a pretty soft piece until this line which is heavy stuff.
(thought the line to be a bit wordy)

i particularly enjoyed the line " because with you... i was everything i wasn't"
its an accurate reflection on the emotions involved.

nice one
5/5