Wow...I loved this poem. I just wrote a dark poem with a friend and this was just like it. I got such a dark and eerie feeling from it. Your diction is amazing and I love how creative your imagery is. I felt like you had a good balance between your emotions as well as your style. Nothing overpowered the other, if you know what I mean lol. I think you did a good job with the story line and I enjoyed this from start to finish. Nice work hun :) Nik
Personally I am no great liker of dark poetry as this earth holds to many beautiful and joyous things for it to grab me and after reading such poems I always feel sorry for its writer as there is so much more in joy than wallowing in the darkness.
So as you requested I broke my usual back turning and read it several times and the poems make up is outstanding though I have read many similar poems this is perhaps one of the best it kept my attention and finished with excellence well done 5/5 Ray S
I usually try and avoid dark poems because they tend to be the same among this sites users, but this one was done quite well. I loved the flow and imagery they were both done fantasticly. The poem stayed strong throughout and the ending was perfect. Great job 5/5 GG23
Hmm... the images i got with this poem were kinda disturbing but painful if that makes sense to you i mean i felt alot of the emotion you put in to this and it was a great write and i enjoyed it but it has me thinking but i guess thats a good thing