Wow, now this one I love.
"Somewhere over the rainbow"
^ that threw me off at first but it works I like how you wrote. you definetly are getting the hang of it. (:

I wrote a poem similar to this but its about never wanting to wake up from a good dream.
I really liked this a lot

From the darkness eyes appear
Their faces invisible and unclear
Voices mumble but i cannot hear
My curiosity suddenly turns to fear

Critisism= I think "suddenly" threw me off a bit. But if it works for you then keep it ;)

The stanza mentioned by Bad Habits is my fave. You have a great sence of vocabulary. I think I'll be reading more of your work. Awsome write.