I liked the meaning and idea behind this, it was well-thought out. If you want to elaborate on it more, go into more detail about it, that could work also. I just felt this was a bit brief. My opinion though, keep writing always.

God bless you and Merry Christmas!

~MaryAnne

Thank you. i wanted to expand on it more, but i didn't know how yet. when i find time, im hoping to turn it into a real poem.