Amazing imagery , and your rhymes aren't perfect but they still go nicely with the poem . 5/5

A nice write. It was quite the adventure of imagery, you sure do capture a lot of interesting pictures in your works.
WakingFreedom

...... Speechless! If there were words that a person could write just to comment on this it would have to be..... Beautiful! 5/5

Beautifuly done, it puts your reader on a small adventure through some remnance of how your thinking works. It dives into your postive and negitive with a very smooth transition never letting the reader get too complacent with the suroundings between beauty and horror. I absolutly loved it. Your a very talented writer, and I will surly read more!