I thouroughly enjoyed this poem. It read it through a few times to really let it sink in.
My favourite was "Madness caressing a crazed mind
Convinced that no one can comprehend
The loneliness behind the sin"

I dont really think you need to improve on much. It had a good flow to me, and an amazing theme. Good work:)

I like your sense of repetition at the end and beginning , but i would much rather if the rest of the poem rhymed ; but that's alot of work to do . Still , fantastic idea and very sad . Really well done , 5/5 .

Awesome poem. i can relate to this becuz i have built up anger lol. very good. very very good. i love the ending. 10/5!!!

Another brilliant write! It was an awesome part two for Ruby Red Tears. Gah, I love the imagery and the emotion. It expressed anger so vividly I grew goosebumps. This piece is true with anger and an excellent write. 5/5
WakingFreedom

This wasn't an awesome poem.
This was brilliant, and I enjoyed it.
The fear it expressed was amazing, made the hair on the back of my neck stand up.
Anger expressed in this poem was dark, darker than any tunnel, and I loved that. Although it didn't rhyme at some parts, it was very good(: