Comments : NOT MEANT TO BE.

  • 10 years ago

    by Hallucinostic

    I find this lovely, what am I saying, its love poem, anyways, I really enjoyed reading this. Nice work.

  • 9 years ago

    by Aveena

    Thank you

  • 9 years ago

    by The Poetic Child

    Dang girl, you can write.
    Those i think you had a spell check error on heart ;)
    this is simple yet effective. good stuff
    5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    I love this and feel everything I can really relate :) 5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by Darren

    Good stuff, nice emotion, just watch the apostrophes, It's, and I've,

    I have been a bit anal, but I have written it without the grammer mistakes, and spelling (heart instead of heaer, saviour instead of savior..)

    I hope this helps you, a little polish can turn a good poem into a beautiful one;

    I've given you my heart,
    Its yours to keep,
    Told you to saviour it,
    I don't want to weep.

    You said you wouldn't,
    you don't want to see me cry,
    nothing to break up could,
    but one night you said bye.

    Days and days go by,
    No one says hi,
    Didn't think I'd see your face again,
    Never thought you'd find another.

    Seeing you and her hold hands,
    Makes me die a little more inside,
    I want to jump from the roof,
    but where will I land..?
    Thirty Six feet underground,
    without you by my side.

    -With you is where I want to be
    but I don't think we are meant to be

    regards

    Darren

    • 8 years ago

      by Aveena

      Thanks so much ^.^ i did not notice those small errors.