Once again, i love it! so powerful. it captivates the reader and really makes them feel for the girl. i loved the lines "but stories don't end the way you want them to; you can wish on a star but it won't come true." so true and worded well. you are an incredible writer, i really enjoyed reading this. 5/5 :)

I dont know. this poem seemed a bit empty to me. yes it did have emotion in it and some good lines, but they where lost in the poem overall. that is why i nearly never like four line rhyming poetry. it seems to me if you write like that you always haveto sacrifice what you really want to say in favour of something that rhymes and fits into four lines. yes this poem was pretty and had the resemblance of reality. but to me it felt a bit like costume jewelry, it appeared real but wasnt really. pluss this style is just so generic. everyone writes like this and says they love it, so i dont know, maybe i am just too stupid to see what is so obvious to everyone else or maybe people are just so many sheep. lol i am probably just an idiot

Hmmm...maybe me and Rocky were reading different poems. I really liked this piece. I saw it in the contest and I loved it. You used the song title well and overall this was intense and very emotional. I love the imagery and the laid backness of this poem. It wasn't too depressng and all in your face. It had a somber kind of lingering feel to it. I think you did a wonderful job and I wouldn't be surprised if you won. Great work dear :) Nik