Comments : Firestorms and Color Swarms

  • 14 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Your titles just keep surprising me, the uniqueness shown is just incredible.

    "I want to feel the sky vibrate,
    Like your skin upon my cheek,
    The warmth of scarlet winds
    Churn the depths within my heart."

    Your writing style is fresh to the soul, not cliche in words but new and imaginitive. This made me long to be with that special someone.

    "Subtle sparks begin to fade,
    Like your kiss in masquerade,
    As sounds of whimsy whisper
    To the spirits in my mind."

    The feeling caught here just travels around in my mind, wonderful work.

    "I want to see the sun erupt,
    Like the joy inside your eyes,
    The surface of the gloom ignites,
    Ashes rain like psychedelic snow."

    This had to be one of my favorite lines, though I can not like the others less. The first two lines were filled with such love and tenderness, I just automatically felt a joy inside of me.

    "Trees suchlike banana peels weep,
    Like the tears within your deepest sleep,
    As memories of forgotten passion sing
    To the caverns of my yearning soul."

    A wonderful ending, I really can say no more. I haven't read your work in such a long time, and reading it tonight is like breathing the cool winter air, I just feel anew.

    Thank you for that, keep writing!

    ~MaryAnne

  • 14 years ago

    by OHgreenman

    Great imagery and expression from start to finish!! Your use of words and descriptions were very unique and what made this piece a joy to read.