So few people can master poetry such as this, and look at you, writing like a pro! I loved this piece! you seem to blow me away with every write no matter the form or the topic! Great work!

Landy,

Well done on writing a formed poem, people say this structure is quite simple but I think not, I believe no formed poem is simple hence why i'm always writing free verse. I remember in the RTVW writing challenges you had some trouble with syllables but not here, the count was perfect and i'm impressed.

I liked the use of archaic language in this poem, it really worked well with the theme, even though you're however not trying to portray this I got the feeling of the Garden of Eden from your poem, it's amazing how such a short poem can portray such beautiful imagery into my mind...

I felt a tranquil feeling while reading this poem, your words literally relaxed me and for that again I am impressed. Not too many nature poems are written these days and as much as I adore nature and use it in my poems I never seem to create a lovely nature poem so well done for this.

Overall a lovely read.
-Mel.

& thank you for the comments you have been leaving on my poetry, I have just been busy the past few months that I havn't been able to write too many comments, but I am reading.

You have done a wonderful job on this form Landy.

Bind me for eternity.
^^^
Love the ending. Wraps it up nicely!