Comments : Empty Coffin

  • 14 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    Then put you in the coffin, you'll fit in fine
    -- I think the last part would sound better as "you'll fit just fine"

    Instead of writing "n" I think it'd be better if you wrote out "and".

    I liked the poem as a whole, just some minor details that I'd fix. :]

    --Cayce;;