Guys definately can be jerks but a lot of the times its the girls fault because you know he's that way but you go after him anyways. I think with your poems you should try and keep your lines all around the same length. Try to add or subtract a few words on certain lines to help with flow. sometimes try and use words that means the same as another just smaller and sounding better. It will help challenge you and you'll become a better writer :) nice job 5/5

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I really loved this. it's so heartbreaking and life just plain sucks. great job with this one :) please read my new one? "unrecognizable"

This was a really good poem, the rhyming worked quite well but I think some of the lines should be made smaller in order to allow the flow to be more consistant =] Great job though this is a nicley written piece.

I loved this poem for a few reasons. The style that you used i also use and i love it. And also the flow and works were great and made it very heartfelt. great poem! 5/5