I didn't find this dark at all, more about life I think. Good message and is delivered nicely. Well done.

You have such an imagination I never dreamed of seeing in poetry. I loved how you wrote this, it was unique.

Lovely poem 5/5

Lovely poem 5/5

Nik
It would be great if we could keep our childhood fantasies and feelings. Beautiful piece. To bad we have to grow up and have the reality of life hit us.
Great job!
Take Care
*hugs
Cindy

Ooooo..this is penned very nicely my dear.
It flowed well & each line had that feeling of
wanting freedom to love freely..good write :)

Unusual form, but it works well and is easy to read. Left me with a smile remembering the carefree days of childhood.