Comments : Alcoholic Demise

  • 13 years ago

    by CY GINDLE

    You make death sound like a welcome friend
    and that is what makes this poem even through its so well written so sad. drowning
    in self pity is what I was always told.any
    way I like your style especially that pause
    < two word> between each part that was
    excellent way to keep the flow.5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Midnight Sun

    In the fourth verse you might wanna take "My" outta the first line because you already preceded it with "As my". But overall this poem was really well put together! Once again the progression was great. And everything was vivid and easily pictured. If the last poem didn't put you in my favorites then this one would have! 5/5 again!