Aww jeez this made me really sad :( very well done. Love the big heap of emotions you poured into this piece. Nik

You did a wonderful job describing a totally broken heart as I feel many a times and the emotion is outstanding in this piece. I was glued to it from the first to the last. I know whatever happen may have been hard for you but just remember I am always here. :]

The reader can definitely feel your emotions & breaks the readers heart to reach such emotions... the pain is just screaming through all your words... really nicely done .. but very depressing.

Sylvia
This pain in your words can only be felt by someone who has lost their life's love.

Unbearable palpable pain,
heart ripped from its mooring
in the safe harbor of your love.
Silent screams escape trembling lips,
tears erupt, cascade down my cheeks.
No breath will come,
only gasps between sobs,
hands pull hair,
moans of anguish won't quit

When the one we love with all we are ceases to breathe..our hearts want to stop beating with theirs. How hard it is to get through each day without them. This piece is so full of raw emotion. Heart wrenching.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Sylvia, Im so sorry to learn of the loss of someone special to you... Lol. A heart wrenching write... much love and heartfelt sympathy,
Olwin.

I love the vastness of the vocabulary in here. Amazing Job. I love it

"heart ripped from its mooring
in the safe harbor of your love."

My favorite part! It made me pause for a minute and really think about that. A very well written poem! Keep writing so I may keep reading xoxo
~Megan

So much pain floods this poem, deep from the very core of your being. I wish you comfort and acceptance in your time of turmoil.

The title gave me this image of Darth Vader learning that Padmae (his wife) had died. it was kinda corny the way the movie (star wars episode 3) ended.

anyway. the rest of the poem was quite serious and saddening.

nice write
~Kuro

I must admit the title was what pulled me in to read this very sad write. Filled with such bittersweet emotion and pain. Very descriptive piece, I enjoyed reading this one.