Comments : My wife

  • 13 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Your words were simple yet powerfully put, your flow is a little rocky in some places, but other than that your poem shows deep emtion.

  • 13 years ago

    by Shinobi

    It is kind of cheezie, but indeed a nice poem. It reminds of a childrens poetry actually, no offence. I liked the playful rhymes aabb. The words were simple but straight from the heart. There were some parts of it that ruined the flow a bit, seemed like you wrote them just for the sake of a rhyme, such as: "I don't care how big the crowd" I'd try to find another sentance to switch it with. Overall I enjoyed reading it, you still have some potential :) 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by MaSkEdSoUl

    I liked it, it flowed nicely. But for the last part

    "But of course, she's my angel from above. "

    you could put "angel from up above", thats just my opinion :)