Well done..u flipped the whole quotation through my mind...i loved the last 7 lines.. b honest///been my fav...i understood and loved completely.

ur a gd poet
gd luck
5/5

Interesting perspective, hope you can let go of the regret you have...because with it it can do a lot of damage.. A good write

And I have only
one defense mechanism.

waking up.

^^ i reaally loved those lines! I love your similes in this poem! I thought you did excellent for whatever contest that was! Worth the read, unique and very creative!

I think that THEY in the fiist verse souls be THAT.
The line "all corners of the horizon." sound off try re-wording it.
A secret place created by the inner
workings of this twisted
brain of mine. "this secret place created by the twisted workings of my mind." I thought that this line sounded better re-worded.

I love this piece especially the last line. I did suggest a few tweaks that I thought helped with wording issues, but they're optional. I really like the guessing game/mind tease that played throughout the piece.
I'm glad that I read this poem.
Thank you so much.
>~Spirit~>