Very intense and well penned

That was great, I really enjoyed it. Saw alot of my own frustration coming through as I read on. Thanks.

I loved reading this. It was very different, wasn't expecting the ending. The rhyming was a little off, but it seemed to flow good. I liked how you broke it up into seperate parts, that helped a lot. Keep up the great work.
5/5

Svandyke