I think this was a very good piece with a good message behind it ! I really like the way you wrote this, like a story. It was an enjoyable read and im loving the truth it has :D kudos!

I enjoyed this piece, but it seemed like it was a little rushed.

"The wise man says,
Thinking he is wise.
"The least often for me, I'll choose"
As if to save himself demise."

I think you could play around with this stanza a bit more to get a full effect.

All in all, I loved the whole Idea of the poem:) incredibly creative

Jessie