Comments : The Forest

  • 15 years ago

    by Sunshine

    I love this poem, I love the images and the word choice.You have done a great job with some lines, you got a lot of deep precise one; which I had a liking over..

    the only thing I think i disliked is the way u repeated trees again TOO soon in the following lines

    The delicate flowers sway in the breeze
    Leaves dance in the trees
    I keep moving through the forest
    Slants of light shine through the trees
    ^^it would be better for your poem, and the sake of your flow; if you replace it with another word :)

    The wind blows throughout the forest
    Brushing sweet scents across my face
    ^^i think you have a very smart beginning, opening lines must be strong, and this was catchy and strong..well done

    5/5